Shameless author alert! Now that that's out of the way, I wanted to make a story like this for quite a while but there was never a good time, then I saw this writing prompt. If you enjoy the story please drop some power stones as it will allow me to know you enjoy it. Also please review, I don't mind criticism, as long as its constructive. Toodles
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Hi, I too was looking through the writing promp when I saw your novel so I figured I'd take a look. So, let me tell you a few comments on your first chapter. Your novel is interesting anyway I found it so. However, be carefull with all the spacing between every sentences. If you look at the top of your novel you'll notice that there is a spacing for every sentences when you could just put them together for like 5-6 lines before using a spacing. This way, the novel is easier to read ;). Anyway, I hope you will continue the novel since it's interesting and original in it's own right :) Hope it helped a little and keep it up💪🏼.
Thanks, I’ll definitely try to lessen the spaces in the coming chapters.
When its time for Aron to pick his cultivation methods it should be a element\ frost path 2 reasons. The first reason is when he breaks through every time he feels a chill and you could use that as a hint for reader's to know what type of element he be able to willed. The second one is that Aron personality doesn't suit fire element path because he is not hot-headed as far as we can tell and is more calm and sharp so it leans more toward ice/frost path.
When its time for Aron to pick his cultivation methods it should be a element\ frost path 2 reasons. The first reason is when he breaks through every time he feels a chill and you could use that as a hint for reader's to know what type of element he be able to willed. The second one is that Aron personality doesn't suit fire element path because he is not hot-headed as far as we can tell and is more calm and sharp so it leans more toward ice/frost path.
Author will this have a harem?
