Review Detail of Tchao707 in Reborn in Narutoverse with a Unique System

Your story plot is very fast and doe not focus on development. Your mc has no clear motive and can do better to develop him. You spent barely any time describing what your mc doing and the first dungeon fight could be better and, was a wasted opportunity for more as your boss fight was below average and could be better. Orochimaru came out fucking nowhere and he and the mc suddenly became best buddies or it seems he did and that is mostly because you have a lack of good pacing for your plot and development your chapter is pretty short which is why your development and pacing seem so fast. He also changes some characters like their personality or where they are, a great example would be Orochimaru and Rock Lee. If you can take your time to develop your plot and characters and explain your mc action, then you have great potential, as they say, show don't tell. I like to thanks the author for replying to me for deleting my last review by accident, mad respect for doing so and I look forward to your growth as an author.