Review Detail of The_High_Father in Reborn in Narutoverse with a Unique System

Item: Reborn in Narutoverse with a Unique System
Rating: 4.4

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The_High_FatherLv33yrThe_High_Father

First, let's start with the good points. 1- You did not add a store in the system, and this is good because I saw bad stories because of having a store system. 2- you was able to add a background to the mc family without really affecting the whole world. 3- The fact that mc follows a scientific path have possesses capabilities. The bad points: 1- Very short chapters, some less than 500 words and few content, some chapters talk about events that take place in a few minutes. 2- The characters and the dialogues are very shallow, without a soul, when reading them, I imagine that the people who speak have no personality. 3- MC does not seem to have goals or reasons for any of his actions, and he does everything he does just because he does not have anything to do. 4- Like mc, other characters don't seem to do anything but to help mc. Otherwise, you're doing great In this fix, better than a lots of naruto FICS I read before.

Reborn in Narutoverse with a Unique System

Mythical_Soul

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Mythical_SoulAuthorMythical_Soul

The short chapters are due to the fact that I have to help in the house as my mom is sick and I have lots of homework and as for MC's goals it's pretty similar to ur fanfic which is to get girls. His goal will be more emphasized in later chapters.

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

You're doing a great job, I hop your mom is okay

Mythical_Soul:The short chapters are due to the fact that I have to help in the house as my mom is sick and I have lots of homework and as for MC's goals it's pretty similar to ur fanfic which is to get girls. His goal will be more emphasized in later chapters.

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David_DrakeLv4David_Drake

Another bad point is how he pretty much tells us that the MC does this and that and doesn't show any actual scenes of development.

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Yuri_is_NtrLv5Yuri_is_Ntr

👀👀👀 Its very funny, but half of those problems, you have too. And retrospective problems, when you don't show but tells what's mc done as a chore list... And yes, I find you by pure luck.

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

Omg, I knew you're a stalker!!

Yuri_is_Ntr:👀👀👀 Its very funny, but half of those problems, you have too. And retrospective problems, when you don't show but tells what's mc done as a chore list... And yes, I find you by pure luck.

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Yuri_is_NtrLv5Yuri_is_Ntr

I'm not!.... But maybe only a little 😘😘😘

The_High_Father:Omg, I knew you're a stalker!!

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

So you admitted it? Are you the account owner sister or something? Because you are a little weird today.

Yuri_is_Ntr:I'm not!.... But maybe only a little 😘😘😘

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Yuri_is_NtrLv5Yuri_is_Ntr

Unfortunately no, I just have weird mood swings, actually have a fight with my family, beat down as-hole on work and sleep like 4 hours maximum in a day for 2 weeks and somehow, today I feel merry. It's weird....

The_High_Father:So you admitted it? Are you the account owner sister or something? Because you are a little weird today.

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

So it's not your sister? 😶😶

Yuri_is_Ntr:Unfortunately no, I just have weird mood swings, actually have a fight with my family, beat down as-hole on work and sleep like 4 hours maximum in a day for 2 weeks and somehow, today I feel merry. It's weird....

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Yuri_is_NtrLv5Yuri_is_Ntr

I have no siblings.... But I have actually a lot of family members, like an aunt with 2 daughters and uncle with one child, I hate them all❤️❤️❤️

The_High_Father:So it's not your sister? 😶😶

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

Hatred is love!

Yuri_is_Ntr:I have no siblings.... But I have actually a lot of family members, like an aunt with 2 daughters and uncle with one child, I hate them all❤️❤️❤️

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Yuri_is_NtrLv5Yuri_is_Ntr

War is piece Freedom is slavery Ignorance is strength! Give me a death race! Baby. 😘😘😘

The_High_Father:Hatred is love!

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The_High_FatherLv3The_High_Father

You need some medicine

Yuri_is_Ntr:War is piece Freedom is slavery Ignorance is strength! Give me a death race! Baby. 😘😘😘

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Dannt_Lv2Dannt_

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