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Buay_Butler
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2024-07-06 23:28

this author Nikaido. He is one of outstanding webnovel authors with good skill in scene describing. you probably enchanted with his scenes describing. For this book I want to know something. There are too much married women in harem? I don’t like that kind of woman. They’re not deserved for Mc’s holy rod. And there were too much other men’s stains and clues in their holes and on their bodies. after Mc pierce their holes and then he use his rod with other harem’s members that can make other women dirty with other men’s stains and clues.

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Nickaido
NickaidoAuthor

Wait, none of the female heroines are married women thought

Nickaido
NickaidoAuthor

So don't worry.

Buay_Butler
Buay_ButlerLv14

Great! 5 stars. I have read your death guns, And I loved it. But for this story seem you starting well than previous work. It seems the more you write, the better. I really like your scene descriptions. So incomparable. Just few guys can compare you in this aspect.

Nickaido:So don't worry.
Nickaido
NickaidoAuthor

Thanks, check my new works: Era of Players: Death God and My Seven Beautiful Sins!

Buay_Butler:Great! 5 stars. I have read your death guns, And I loved it. But for this story seem you starting well than previous work. It seems the more you write, the better. I really like your scene descriptions. So incomparable. Just few guys can compare you in this aspect.
Buay_Butler
Buay_ButlerLv14

Okay! [img=recommend]But. Hahaha! I praised you a minute then I see your defect. you are lacked rechecking before released chapters. so I can know you copy some scene from your other works. I really don’t mind. But you should recheck characters’s name before releasing. why Alex and Icursio appear here. hehehe dear author!

Nickaido:Thanks, check my new works: Era of Players: Death God and My Seven Beautiful Sins!
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Reading Status: C31 Writing Quality 5/5 Stability of Updates 5/5 Story Development 3/5 Character Design 3/5 World Background 4/5 The total score: 4.0 I recommend reading if you have time 👍 I will wait to read more to update the review to a more objective one, but everything is still young, turning points have not been reached and the character expansion arc will only begin with the academy. It has great potential. Personal comments: I liked the concept of the story, I will add it to my library. On the other hand, I would like to see the protagonist have more "prominence", because it feels like a story with several protagonists and that is not my thing. I know he's OP, but he's seen little of each other, and while I understand he wants to keep a low profile since he's hurt, his cold and detached personality plays tricks on someone who isn't imposingly powerful on the surface, it just seems someone who seeks to become mysterious for the simple fact of being able to do it, and that leaves me with a strange feeling in my mouth, I mean, I love characters like that, but he lacks "Aura of Protagonist", that power and that differentiated personality, or that attribute that characterizes it from the rest, marking its central nature in the history of the plot, and I believe, in my humble opinion, that it takes more than being OP to have this "Aura of Protagonist". Otherwise great job, writing quality is fantastic, although a little more detail and description would be appreciated on certain interactions, like point of view changes, and internal comments, but of course it's all subjective, and adding a few things in certain sites sounds easy, but it is not always. So a few more details would not be bad to help imagine the world and the characters, their interactions and how they are while how they appear to be. As a last point, I would like to go deeper into the interiority of the protagonist, in his background, so that he does not feel so empty, but I understand that this will be seen in the story over time, so it will be easier to understand his actions and his goals, since from what little I've seen, everything is still green and it's hard for me to differentiate if the protagonist is proactive, or simply follows the decisions of others like a beta. The story has potential, I came in with the harem tag so I'm kind of looking forward to it, otherwise the action scenes are great, keep up the great work you're doing. I just hope not NTR! Peace and good luck.

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