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At first It was exciting to read this fic coz it was Starcraft in Starwars verse but as the fic goes on, for me its hard to understand and became convoluted at some point. I first thought like Starcraft game, build base, produce units, gather materials, buy heroes and again and again until he has enough manpower, that how I think he became powerhouse in Star Wars and build his own Empire or planet something typical kingdom building. But its not, author make it more realistic with little game mechanic on it. That's turn me off a little bit. I know its good to be careful but author make protoss careful at some point they look weak on some reader standpoint in order to hide they so called technologies and manpower to the point they were harass by other forces in galaxy and they do nothing and ignore just them. No showing a little power there so that they establish themselves as race that you can't mess around with. Sucks tho good thing author tells that MC has no skills in playing the war. It feels like the MC only there to summon the units and heroes in Starcraft to Starwars and let them be. Feels like he has no real power there and he only respect or follow by heroes because he summoned them and that's what their mind says like protocol other than that feels like MC before reincarnated didn't play Starcraft and only watching in sideline while someone playing Starcraft on some Internet cafe. And then comes down the latest chapter when he became Zerg, the Star Wars and Protoss arc didn't finish yet then MC became Zero in the process out of nowhere. Story development sucks to me especially I played Starcraft since launch. Well its my opinion anyway and heads up on future readers what to expect and what's inside this fanfic, goodluck anyway. This constructive criticism if authors weak minded will be deleted so does the rating I put on this fic cause that what it feels like it when I read this fic until latest chapter. What a letdown.
An ton's Journey ( StarCraft + other worlds)
Muravey
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Idk what you are talking about in last sentences, but I can see why you are disappointed. Yes, It might've been not the best way for me to introduce zerg, but it is too late now. As for mc not being good at warfare or controlling 'empire', it is obvious. He was just a simple man. Not an officer, not a genius, not a politician. It would be strange to try and do everything by himself, especially as he have no interest in it. As for protoss being pushed and not establishing dominance? well, there are too few protoss to fight against forces that have hundreds or even thousands of planets under them. Anyway, thank you for leaving your opinion. I will try to be better.
Still I don't understand why he reincarnate in Starwars with Starcraft system? What was purpose on why MC was reincarnated? I mean is MC only purpose of existence was to summon the being of Starcraft to Starwars because they universe was destroyed? And let them be. Many details left in the dark tho like sometimes how he knows what mechanics of Starcraft was and etc. Well goodluck to your fic and Ill just hold reading this fic it make my brainless on what I know of Starcraft is. Just keep writing and maybe incorporate some of the advise of your reader or not. Its up to you anyway. Sometimes critic was good to make you a better writer, it tells you what you can't see or different perspective of different people. Sometimes just ignore it. Just continue writing and maybe you get better someday.
Muravey:Idk what you are talking about in last sentences, but I can see why you are disappointed. Yes, It might've been not the best way for me to introduce zerg, but it is too late now. As for mc not being good at warfare or controlling 'empire', it is obvious. He was just a simple man. Not an officer, not a genius, not a politician. It would be strange to try and do everything by himself, especially as he have no interest in it. As for protoss being pushed and not establishing dominance? well, there are too few protoss to fight against forces that have hundreds or even thousands of planets under them. Anyway, thank you for leaving your opinion. I will try to be better.
Protoss can make one at a time under their rule or alliance in outer realm. So that they can get properly establish forces or just let the MC summon more forces through gathering resources. I mean the jedi and republic declare they were their enemy why they can't fight back especially the hutts and other keep harassing them.
Muravey:Idk what you are talking about in last sentences, but I can see why you are disappointed. Yes, It might've been not the best way for me to introduce zerg, but it is too late now. As for mc not being good at warfare or controlling 'empire', it is obvious. He was just a simple man. Not an officer, not a genius, not a politician. It would be strange to try and do everything by himself, especially as he have no interest in it. As for protoss being pushed and not establishing dominance? well, there are too few protoss to fight against forces that have hundreds or even thousands of planets under them. Anyway, thank you for leaving your opinion. I will try to be better.
They have advance technologies that haven't known in star wars that will give them edge on top of that MC can summon more units if he has enough resources. And deathstar didn't even exist yet so what are they afraid of? They only afraid of the unknown that's why they have gather intel. They can teleport they spies since they have technology of warp.
Muravey:Idk what you are talking about in last sentences, but I can see why you are disappointed. Yes, It might've been not the best way for me to introduce zerg, but it is too late now. As for mc not being good at warfare or controlling 'empire', it is obvious. He was just a simple man. Not an officer, not a genius, not a politician. It would be strange to try and do everything by himself, especially as he have no interest in it. As for protoss being pushed and not establishing dominance? well, there are too few protoss to fight against forces that have hundreds or even thousands of planets under them. Anyway, thank you for leaving your opinion. I will try to be better.
Good thing MC summon units still follow him like what he says that Palpatine need to die, you guys (the council) think of a way to fulfilled it and Ill just sit back here and pretend that I'm a peasant but the truth was I'm your leader. That's a little show of what kind of MC he is. He pretend to behind the scene guy but the truth was he was not. He only follow what's he's gut feels.
Muravey:Idk what you are talking about in last sentences, but I can see why you are disappointed. Yes, It might've been not the best way for me to introduce zerg, but it is too late now. As for mc not being good at warfare or controlling 'empire', it is obvious. He was just a simple man. Not an officer, not a genius, not a politician. It would be strange to try and do everything by himself, especially as he have no interest in it. As for protoss being pushed and not establishing dominance? well, there are too few protoss to fight against forces that have hundreds or even thousands of planets under them. Anyway, thank you for leaving your opinion. I will try to be better.
thank you. I really appreciate you pointing out my obviously strange choices in the story. yes, I will try to do better, and I always try to take feedback in consideration. I hope that you will have s good time :) I read your replies and now need to think more about the future chapters.
RionSteiner:Still I don't understand why he reincarnate in Starwars with Starcraft system? What was purpose on why MC was reincarnated? I mean is MC only purpose of existence was to summon the being of Starcraft to Starwars because they universe was destroyed? And let them be. Many details left in the dark tho like sometimes how he knows what mechanics of Starcraft was and etc. Well goodluck to your fic and Ill just hold reading this fic it make my brainless on what I know of Starcraft is. Just keep writing and maybe incorporate some of the advise of your reader or not. Its up to you anyway. Sometimes critic was good to make you a better writer, it tells you what you can't see or different perspective of different people. Sometimes just ignore it. Just continue writing and maybe you get better someday.