I'm honestly not even sure this is English. The grammar is bad.
After reading through the first chapter, which is mostly dialogue I got a massive headache which is only getting worse.
Hmm okay. When I write, I use Software to fix grammar and also finding errors in the Text. What made you give a headache? Was the Story confusing or hard to understand? Or is it just that this kind of Novel is not your type. Any feedback is valuable especially in the early stages.