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First off, despite the rating this is not by any means a bad story, it has issues but it has qualities of redemption. Firstly the writing quality, I understand English is not everyone's first language but this book screams machine translation. Poor grammar, misspelt words that sound the same vocally abound. Quite frankly I got through half the released chapters (37 actual, 4 Q & As) and was gonna drop it on how badly the engrish became. Honestly author including the abbreviations and the full word in several places shows a distinct lack of proof reading. Story Development, decent if rushed. Typical zombie apocalypse yet there is literally tons of unanswered questions on how John spreads the virus worldwide from one hick town. Character Design, I literally dislike everyone. John, Dixie, Alexia, Alice, James, Candice... all prime characters who lack any relatable or endearing quality. John starts off as a tragic hero MC but soon goes full angst evil bitch. Updating Stability, from what I've seen updates happen, my biggest issue is wasting chapters on question and answer sections, seriously webnovel books have a specific chapter setting for this sort of thing that does not require breaking up the story or having 41 chapters but the latest title being chapter 37. LEARN TO USE THE SITE AUTHOR World Background... nothing is explained. Yes its the world we live in but everything is just FBI this, police that. The zombie general attacks the white house which seems to lack any defenses just so the author can massacre president "Grump". Alot is glossed over to force plot. In closing, the book isn't bad. The premise starts off great... its just i feel someone coated the sled bottom in no stick spray before rushing down the hill, the speed is going at break neck pace with no ability to enjoy the ride. When it stops it won't be to a kid laughing in wild fun, it'll be to tears on a good premise rushed and squandered.

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ThatFroggyBastard
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I like your review and trust me I take what advice I can. Some of what you say is true since I really didn't plan the the first half of this story I am planning the second since this story is going to be more of a prologue to another story that I'll begin planning after I get 3/4 finished with this. As for the grammar errors is I can say belong to me writing after working a 4 to 12 job that is picky about what we can take home to eat. So trust me I'll fix my grammar errors in future writing.