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Perhaps the author is a good person but ..... Fan fiction doesn't read like a tragedy. Read like a cuckold story. He had strength, but he did nothing. Even if he did not have strength, this would not be a cukold’s refutation. A man must fight for his love. A man who allows his girlfriend to sleep with another or to marry another, I cease to be men in the eyes of women and become cuckolds. You even screwed up Irene in your story. A woman who loves will not marry someone else's man. Your excuse is only for cuckolds. you are not thinking correctly about a good relationship. I hope in real life you will not suffer from this. I wish the author all the best. If someone against my thinking is ready for dialogue and explanation.
The Black Dragon King of the Void [Stopped]
Fir3Cooz
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These sad people trust in the first chapter to judge a story. In addition, this is absolutely not NTR, these are just the beginning of the story's introduction. I am well aware that the beginnings are likely similar to the original story but I repeat, these are just the beginnings of fanfiction and this will only be for the Fairy Tail arc. After, each in his opinion, I will not force anyone to love him, I do this for fun but I only find it unfortunate that people trust the first chapters without giving a second chance. In addition, Irene did not sleep with anyone other than Sora as specified in a chapter.
Why was the marriage of Dragnoff and Irene necessary? Have you tried to show the tragedy and get the response of readers? All this is nonsense. I explain. The political marriage of the monarchs implies the birth of a child from two royal lines of blood, as the union of two kingdoms. In this case, Irene and Dragnoff. They will have a child. There was no answer. This marriage will have a positive effect on the two kingdoms. There is no answer. The only consequence of this will be a war in the country. Marriage was not needed. It was possible to conclude an alliance with the kingdom of Dragnof on its own terms, since Irene had Belserion, dragons, and Sora. She was quite able to demand her conditions in an alliance, rightfully her strength, and not marry Dragnoff, betraying him and “suffering” about Sora. As a result, you showed Irene in such images as Dragnoff told about her in the real story “Fairy Tail.” Like a whore sleeping with a dragon and a child from the dragon, which was a lie in reality. Now in your story all this is true. The big minus of this story. The author you showed Sora at the beginning as the king of black dragons, equal to Acnalogy. We look at his actions. He defeated most of the hostile dragons, established himself as a significant force on this continent and received the approval of the people of the kingdom. What did he do with all this when Irene told him about marriage. Nothing. The dragon king allowed his woman to marry another man and accept all this. Sound like nonsense. Even an ordinary guy try to do something. The system forbade something? Just an excuse. He did nothing against it. He did not try to talk , didn’t try to fight, and he didn’t try to show that he was against Irene’s marriage. For all his strength, he allowed his love to be married to another. He did nothing. The fact that Irene didn’t sleep with Dragnofam does not justify him. This is the behavior of a cuckold. .How to now take him as a hero th story? I don’t know. It’s all disgusting to the main character. If all this in real life, Sora would be a cuckold. For the sake of fear of changing the beginning of the story of Fairy Tail, all this happened. Therefore, I put such ratings to this fan fiction. Perhaps the story and improve. But the beginning of the story is spoiled, and the beginning of the story is the main guarantee of success.
Fir3Cooz:These sad people trust in the first chapter to judge a story. In addition, this is absolutely not NTR, these are just the beginning of the story's introduction. I am well aware that the beginnings are likely similar to the original story but I repeat, these are just the beginnings of fanfiction and this will only be for the Fairy Tail arc. After, each in his opinion, I will not force anyone to love him, I do this for fun but I only find it unfortunate that people trust the first chapters without giving a second chance. In addition, Irene did not sleep with anyone other than Sora as specified in a chapter.
It is true that all this is ugly for Sora and it is not as if he accepted it but it is not an idiot, the system told him not to intervene too much in the story for the moment. Even if he is a dragon king, there is always a mortal and an ant in the universe. It is not foolish enough to go against the advice of the system which is literally not far from omniscience, he prefers to suffer in his heart than to see a disaster happen to his family, besides Irene make no mistake, her "husband" is only a title for her. You have to know how to make sacrifices and accept the fact of not being all-powerful to become one. Yes the Dragnof kingdom has dragons, Sora, ... but even with that, there are powerful enemies, there are a huge number of dragons and powerful dragon kings as well as Acnologia. Even having everything they already have, the kingdom of Dragnof despite their power can not do anything against the strength of an entire continent full of powerful dragons and human kingdom, political marriage is a way to increase security of the Kingdom. Being king or queen is never easy, you have to know how to make sacrifices for your people. This is my point of view, of course I also understand yours and I am thinking of changing it. The Fairy Tail arc isn't actually the most attractive, exciting, and interesting, but that's how I introduced the beginning of my story; the following arcs will be more interesting and will change from the main story. I reflect daily on the events of the Fairy Tail arc to improve it and for the next arcs. You have to take into account that this is my first story or even that I write but I do it anyway for fun, I am very bad at writing but I do my best. I hope to improve over time.
zangeras999:Why was the marriage of Dragnoff and Irene necessary? Have you tried to show the tragedy and get the response of readers? All this is nonsense. I explain. The political marriage of the monarchs implies the birth of a child from two royal lines of blood, as the union of two kingdoms. In this case, Irene and Dragnoff. They will have a child. There was no answer. This marriage will have a positive effect on the two kingdoms. There is no answer. The only consequence of this will be a war in the country. Marriage was not needed. It was possible to conclude an alliance with the kingdom of Dragnof on its own terms, since Irene had Belserion, dragons, and Sora. She was quite able to demand her conditions in an alliance, rightfully her strength, and not marry Dragnoff, betraying him and “suffering” about Sora. As a result, you showed Irene in such images as Dragnoff told about her in the real story “Fairy Tail.” Like a whore sleeping with a dragon and a child from the dragon, which was a lie in reality. Now in your story all this is true. The big minus of this story. The author you showed Sora at the beginning as the king of black dragons, equal to Acnalogy. We look at his actions. He defeated most of the hostile dragons, established himself as a significant force on this continent and received the approval of the people of the kingdom. What did he do with all this when Irene told him about marriage. Nothing. The dragon king allowed his woman to marry another man and accept all this. Sound like nonsense. Even an ordinary guy try to do something. The system forbade something? Just an excuse. He did nothing against it. He did not try to talk , didn’t try to fight, and he didn’t try to show that he was against Irene’s marriage. For all his strength, he allowed his love to be married to another. He did nothing. The fact that Irene didn’t sleep with Dragnofam does not justify him. This is the behavior of a cuckold. .How to now take him as a hero th story? I don’t know. It’s all disgusting to the main character. If all this in real life, Sora would be a cuckold. For the sake of fear of changing the beginning of the story of Fairy Tail, all this happened. Therefore, I put such ratings to this fan fiction. Perhaps the story and improve. But the beginning of the story is spoiled, and the beginning of the story is the main guarantee of success.
That all just excuses nothing more.He could do many things to prevent it.But didnt so he is not qualified to be called man at all.U destroyed ur story with begining.It doesnt matter how much better it becomes in the future if u destroy image of mc in the begining.If we see that mc is reterded pussy cuckhold we lose all interest in reading about such trash.
Fir3Cooz:It is true that all this is ugly for Sora and it is not as if he accepted it but it is not an idiot, the system told him not to intervene too much in the story for the moment. Even if he is a dragon king, there is always a mortal and an ant in the universe. It is not foolish enough to go against the advice of the system which is literally not far from omniscience, he prefers to suffer in his heart than to see a disaster happen to his family, besides Irene make no mistake, her "husband" is only a title for her. You have to know how to make sacrifices and accept the fact of not being all-powerful to become one. Yes the Dragnof kingdom has dragons, Sora, ... but even with that, there are powerful enemies, there are a huge number of dragons and powerful dragon kings as well as Acnologia. Even having everything they already have, the kingdom of Dragnof despite their power can not do anything against the strength of an entire continent full of powerful dragons and human kingdom, political marriage is a way to increase security of the Kingdom. Being king or queen is never easy, you have to know how to make sacrifices for your people. This is my point of view, of course I also understand yours and I am thinking of changing it. The Fairy Tail arc isn't actually the most attractive, exciting, and interesting, but that's how I introduced the beginning of my story; the following arcs will be more interesting and will change from the main story. I reflect daily on the events of the Fairy Tail arc to improve it and for the next arcs. You have to take into account that this is my first story or even that I write but I do it anyway for fun, I am very bad at writing but I do my best. I hope to improve over time.
hey I have a question I understand why he did it from what you say but are you trying to write a story for NTR cause you are the author and could have made it so the 'system' didn't say that I mean the system saying this is just a excuse you are the author and this is your book so the system did not have to say that and she did not need to marry him in this logic cause it's your book if you don't want them to marry they don't have to so you have to want then to marry you can not blame the system or anything cause this is your book and you write on it so this marriage could just not happen
Fir3Cooz:It is true that all this is ugly for Sora and it is not as if he accepted it but it is not an idiot, the system told him not to intervene too much in the story for the moment. Even if he is a dragon king, there is always a mortal and an ant in the universe. It is not foolish enough to go against the advice of the system which is literally not far from omniscience, he prefers to suffer in his heart than to see a disaster happen to his family, besides Irene make no mistake, her "husband" is only a title for her. You have to know how to make sacrifices and accept the fact of not being all-powerful to become one. Yes the Dragnof kingdom has dragons, Sora, ... but even with that, there are powerful enemies, there are a huge number of dragons and powerful dragon kings as well as Acnologia. Even having everything they already have, the kingdom of Dragnof despite their power can not do anything against the strength of an entire continent full of powerful dragons and human kingdom, political marriage is a way to increase security of the Kingdom. Being king or queen is never easy, you have to know how to make sacrifices for your people. This is my point of view, of course I also understand yours and I am thinking of changing it. The Fairy Tail arc isn't actually the most attractive, exciting, and interesting, but that's how I introduced the beginning of my story; the following arcs will be more interesting and will change from the main story. I reflect daily on the events of the Fairy Tail arc to improve it and for the next arcs. You have to take into account that this is my first story or even that I write but I do it anyway for fun, I am very bad at writing but I do my best. I hope to improve over time.