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White_Falcon21
White_Falcon21Lv24yr
2020-05-02 12:25

Zero here! It's zero--OOFF!!! Let's see... A typical genre that became popular in Japan from 2012, but originally, this genre first published in 1980. This is a genre that I always edited and supervised... Well, the story about MC got "reincarnated" into world because crushed by truck-kun or car-kun...hummm... Writing Quality It's simple and easy to read. Keep it up, cause you don't have "Mystery" tag on your novel. Stability of Updates You promised that? Then do it if your wish come true! At least you must make a hanging ending and a bit long chapter. I'm rooting for you! Story Development I saw "Harem", "OP-MC", "Magic", "Reincarnated" tags on your novel. So, I have known "what will your story become". At least, do not make a "Typical Japanese Isekai story", cause it's already "well-known". You must make your own story DIFFERENT than that. About fantasy "elements" such as Beasts, Monsters, Magic, Runes, Chant Words, The World itself, Monarchy, Kingdoms, Lords, Gods, etc...I hope you can explain to the readers in simpler ways yet interesting. Since Monsters, Politics, Magic and Adventurer Equipment are the most difficult "elements" to explain (from my experience). Well since, this genre is my forte, do not disappoint me and your readers! UFFF XD. Character Design I have known what they look like, what they will do and what are their characters, because it's still chapter seven, I don't want to make a comment "outside my view" and I don't want to "go ahead of myself" because "it will ruin everything" World Background It's typical "World" in "Fantasy Genre". So, I have known that and their types. Here we go! and then excuse meeeeeeeeeeeeeee.....whoosh..... Note: If someone wants to ask about review about fantasy genre or learn about fantasy, please contact me!

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BRPever
BRPeverAuthor

Thank you so much for the suggestion. I will try to keep this in mind moving ahead :)

Eternal_life
Eternal_lifeLv13

Hi there, Great work author, keep up the good work. Rooting for you ❤️. . . . On another note, a great constructive review.. I'd die to have one review my book this way 😢 If I could ve Shameless here 😉 I'd be honored if you could review that book of mine 😁 it's fantasy as well Thank you ❤️

Eternal_life
Eternal_lifeLv13

Give me your discord 4 number tag Mine is same name, tag is #1939

Nikhil_Chand
Nikhil_ChandLv4

there is no more harem tag!! so have you removed harem from the story?

BRPever:Thank you so much for the suggestion. I will try to keep this in mind moving ahead :)
BRPever
BRPeverAuthor

Nope, it's still there and I am planning to work more on it but the tag wasn't working properly last time when I checked it from desktop so I removed it, I'll readd it, thanks for the reminder :)

Nikhil_Chand:there is no more harem tag!! so have you removed harem from the story?
BRPever
BRPeverAuthor

I talked with the staff and they said they will look into this soon :)

Nikhil_Chand:there is no more harem tag!! so have you removed harem from the story?
Nikhil_Chand
Nikhil_ChandLv4

Good I will start story in a few hours

BRPever:I talked with the staff and they said they will look into this soon :)
Jeremy_Crouch
Jeremy_CrouchLv10

Neat.

Grizz_Bear
Grizz_BearLv11

Excuse me. Is this harem or not? I'm not read this novel yet. Sometimes when i see novel that have harem tag, it's kinda make me prejudice badly against that novel. I'm not kinda against harem, but sometimes the romances and harem kinda bit forced, so it's make me drop halfway. If not (or there is), i hope it's flow naturally and smooth. I hope it's not a kind of novel where when the MC meet female, then after a few second (like every times) the 'forced situations' happens. Like in a novel that i read that the MC meet many females then the female slipped and the MC got to save her but touch something instead, or when the MC and the female sleep together because they have to share same tent then the MC move and hold held like a pillow. Urghh. Well, maybe i prejudice against overly pervert and polygamy.

BRPever
BRPeverAuthor

There isn't much progress on that part until now. The MC isn't really mature enough to play with girls yet. But there is someone perverted in this story and the later part will have some more development in the harem part... But MC is going to develop slowly... Sorry if it doesn't suit your taste :)

Grizz_Bear:Excuse me. Is this harem or not? I'm not read this novel yet. Sometimes when i see novel that have harem tag, it's kinda make me prejudice badly against that novel. I'm not kinda against harem, but sometimes the romances and harem kinda bit forced, so it's make me drop halfway. If not (or there is), i hope it's flow naturally and smooth. I hope it's not a kind of novel where when the MC meet female, then after a few second (like every times) the 'forced situations' happens. Like in a novel that i read that the MC meet many females then the female slipped and the MC got to save her but touch something instead, or when the MC and the female sleep together because they have to share same tent then the MC move and hold held like a pillow. Urghh. Well, maybe i prejudice against overly pervert and polygamy.
The_OneShadow
The_OneShadowLv14

Wow this is a really insightful view and I’m trying to write a fantasy novel that suits my ideas and tastes

White_Falcon21
White_Falcon21Lv2

Hmu

The_OneShadow:Wow this is a really insightful view and I’m trying to write a fantasy novel that suits my ideas and tastes
White_Falcon21
White_Falcon21Lv2

I'd check it today and give my review like this since I had finished "Rising Against Fate". Could you please check my Dead/Lost? Since it's buried deep inside many WN Books without getting any kind of attention.

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BRPever
BRPeverAuthor

OSNOF, I like your enthusiasm but please stop spamming the message. I am a fellow writer too and this doesn't reflect well on the work. If you want your novel to come out more then just keep on writing for the readers... And one day they will eventually come to you... You see, most of the popular novels here came out themselves. As authors, we all respect others and their work. and this is what makes writing awesome :)

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Me_Personally7
Me_Personally7Lv2

Yay! The author replied to my message!!! Author, before I start apologizing, I just want to say that I LOVE YOUR NOVEL AND I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE!!! Okay, I am sorry for the stupid self-promotion too btw. Please forgive me!

BRPever:OSNOF, I like your enthusiasm but please stop spamming the message. I am a fellow writer too and this doesn't reflect well on the work. If you want your novel to come out more then just keep on writing for the readers... And one day they will eventually come to you... You see, most of the popular novels here came out themselves. As authors, we all respect others and their work. and this is what makes writing awesome :)
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