Review Detail of amaturewriter in The ghost of the Sitri house {DXD fanfic and ... some other anime?}

I star for SD AND CD....its all rushed and some senseless **** happens like riser fighting MC for no reason,,,he is OC, the characters are kinda bland, like in first chp and second it was okay but after that everything seemed kinda rushed,,,,,author bru,,try to improve CD and SD cause everything kinda seems bland, and try to give proper reasons for fights and ****, also MC was a yakuza right, one would you assume to be smart and calculative, well in the latest chp he seems like a retard, like dude just accepts the fight without thinking and spying and you know checking out his enemy,,,,,,,,,build it, meaning, make MC use of his past experiences, i mean thats the reason why I read this story, to see how an SI yakuza would live