Item: VR System In Walking Dead. (dropped)
Rating: 3.6

TonyorobskyLv134yr

2020-04-30 06:21

As a reader keep commenting: QUOTATIONS MARKS!!! Is it so hard to put those little things that allow the reader to know the difference between narrative and speech? Really? A heavy construction company needing a compound for employees and their families? Why not just a technological research company, with the compound for privacy and secrecy? The headhunting of the others main characters is too obvious. They can be recruited when the outbreak is impossible to hide. He should have focused on really important people: doctor, biologist, virologist, engineers, mechanics, programmers, security.

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