Review Detail of neobenmike in War Between Two Different Worlds
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Writing quality is good with stable updates Story development is fast paced Character design is not good World background is still being fleshed out with great potential Peeves It has that - hey we fight, now we friends 'cause reasons Plot holes Some forced plot points MC plot armor makes it so most character accept the mc at face value Dialogues need some work
War Between Two Different Worlds
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Hey, thanks for the review and for being honest. Though, I don't understand where the plot holes are. What is fleshed out? And where is the plot armor? Though, if the reason that plot armor because of his real armor. That is justified in my opinion. And again, thank you very much. Still, I couldn't argue that let's be a friend because of reason plot.
For pot armor I think he is referring to an Mc's ability to expect any bad situation and coming out unscathed because it is essential to the plot. Since obviously no one can do that in real life. Plot holes are a result of some events not being explained enough even if they are critical the the overall plot. Forced plot holes can be very obvious if you read enough fantasy novels, for example how an MC can manage to find an overpowered sword when he needs it the most but its unexplained how he managed to find it. Like a legendary sword laying inside a bush for no particular reason , its just unrealistic you know? For dialogues it can be a problem of flavor text(lack of explaining things in enough detail ,example["The pond water was a greenish murky hue, and had weird mutated fish swimming around"]["She had an unnatural bright blue hair and clear pink eyes, but her face was always in a gnarly frown"]) To improve character designs its always best to have a planned out back story for the important characters even if the readers aren't going to know if it. then give out clues through out the story that could explain a characters behavior towards certain things, (Being scared of bugs because they where attacked by bees as a kid, etc) These are just some things to think about when making the story, of-course I'm just explaining to you what people might mean when they review those things. I haven't read the novel to comment on how good your story is or anything.
synncrytech3:I've just realized that this is actually a re-write of the novel I already read. I feel like I've been fooled, anyways think about these things please, because if you are going to make this into a serious novel you should do it correctly :/