Review Detail of Valence_Lao in Yudham- The war that trembled all the Planes

Fresh Lore, a Unique Face in Fiction. The story itself is good and splayed out enough for an interesting read. I would say that there should be a balance of Showing vs Telling. The paragraphs need to be broken down for a better reading experience. I'm reading on PC but it was still irksome. Other than those minor technicalities, the story has potential. It's deviant from the saturated market of mythology so it has a fresh vibe. Good luck on your writing journey!