My main gripe with the novel is that the love scenes are perfunctory and lacking. There's no passion, just action. Yes, they do it and they talk a big game about doing it and they don't seem to hate it, but its just okay. It doesn't read like there's a lot of love in it just from the lack of detail. The dialogue doesn't feel natural and is a lot of exposition. A lot of details could have been left to author narration instead of incorporated into the dialogue.
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