Review Detail of JiaZuozhe in This is not the End

I'm here to give an honest opinion and criticism of your work, I do enjoy where the story is going and the premise is interesting but you should try installing Grammarly and or some other grammar correction software, and fix the typos and errors in your chapters. I'd really recommend it, it helps me personally when I write to make sure that I avoid and typos and grammatical errors I think I'll really improve your writing and improve your story. Some parts felt a bit rushed and I feel like there were some odd time skips. I'd recommend you take things a bit slower there's no rush and to build a good story you need a stable foundation, don't try and rush things early on to get to the exciting parts. Try and think through some things and flesh out some of the early plotpoints. I'm sure if you just take your time you'll get more views and ratings, also don't try and rush out chapters try doing things more slowly so you don't tire yourself out and hit a writers block. Although I'm probably sure you heard this somewhere else try and keep a more consistent schedule even if the timing is loose its fine if you have more chapters than you need to post than try stockpiling them our and uploading them more consistently through the week. It'll make your story more popular because it'll pop up more often on the updated page rather than all at once.