Review Detail of EsliEsma in Ring Of Chaos

Hmm, the writing could be better and the characters lack in depth characterization. The pacing is fast, and the MC is rather evil. Ignoring my personal opinion on MC, my issue is the psychology state of the villain. Someone that broken would not be able to safely transition to another world and accept a new family, because they are incapable of trust. A more logical conclusion would have been killing his new family. My suggestion is ground your character more, this will make them more realistic and more terrifying.