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Nothing really happens, its a childhood fic in the 1800s with a loy of emphasis on people being typical 'white' people, and an under tge age of 6 initiation of a romantic plot with an equally young girl. Honestly thats disturbing already. Then the author start breaking the 4th wall in a schizophrenic manner and follows it up with adding more divinities to his social contacts list... I felt the world building was subpar, the character hard to relate to or like, the story progression non existent and the writing quality decent. The result of that lead to the rating I have given.

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Chilling in marvel

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100% agree, i am currently rewriting tHe story

BrianGallacher7
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Hi author you said you are rewriting it Try reading super detective In a fictional world for ideas Try combining other worlds I don't have much comic knowledge Please have a non op mc and add other worlds into story Taken, John wick, fast and furious, transporter, equalizer, the raid, die hard, Could have it mc is Tony starks twin brother but due to reincarnation and knowledge of marvel he is way more mature. Have him train martial arts first from stick alongside future matt murdoch then at kun lun, meeting and informing future iron fist of sticks order. Have him train a bit in mystic arts with ancient one that gives him ability to travel around world easier and quicker, Let's things run its course for Tony and rescues him with his own avengers team of non powered but highly skilled individuals

Berserker_Blank:100% agree, i am currently rewriting tHe story
BrianGallacher7
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Being Tony's twin it has added benifits, high iq, being billionaire, being able to use Tony's suits of armour, Could have him when a child meet Ms marvel just after her crash landing before shield get their. To advance local technology has her after building friendship bring him tech from other planets he can have Tony develop it only after he becomes iron man Universal translator Shielding generators Those space face masks Space ship

Berserker_Blank:100% agree, i am currently rewriting tHe story
BrianGallacher7
BrianGallacher7Lv14BrianGallacher7

If you include other worlds within a way to merge them Mc is sitting at the continental in New York after working with Frank Martin to stop some group or something (Jason statham) who is finishing dropping a package of for Winston. As Frank leaves John wick is entering with his bloody shirt and dog. Frank is actually an alias that Deckard Shaw is using because he wants to live quietly for a while. To combine equalizer and John wick could have it they run into each other after end of what would be 1st film he meets Robert mccall at that cafe in first equalizer film, which could be part of the continental network Mccall says something like are you working again And when mc later meets fast and furious group he interferes with that blonde chicks plans, and uses friendship with Derek Shaw to stop Derek's brother so basically the entire 6th 7th and 8th movies from happening

Berserker_Blank:100% agree, i am currently rewriting tHe story
BrianGallacher7
BrianGallacher7Lv14BrianGallacher7

They do a team up John wick, your mc and mccall Mccall and his book, John and his pencil and your mc and his??? ( sharpened ruler, thermos, fan, chop sticks, origami) just few ideas for you author

BrianGallacher7:If you include other worlds within a way to merge them Mc is sitting at the continental in New York after working with Frank Martin to stop some group or something (Jason statham) who is finishing dropping a package of for Winston. As Frank leaves John wick is entering with his bloody shirt and dog. Frank is actually an alias that Deckard Shaw is using because he wants to live quietly for a while. To combine equalizer and John wick could have it they run into each other after end of what would be 1st film he meets Robert mccall at that cafe in first equalizer film, which could be part of the continental network Mccall says something like are you working again And when mc later meets fast and furious group he interferes with that blonde chicks plans, and uses friendship with Derek Shaw to stop Derek's brother so basically the entire 6th 7th and 8th movies from happening
AppleyGod
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Since this comment was 7 months ago, is the uploaded version the rewrite, or is it the old one?

Berserker_Blank:100% agree, i am currently rewriting tHe story