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Review Detail of Tangerqueen in The Paladin Order Reformed

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Overall, great job! Writing Quality (4/5): There's a bit too much of telling instead of showing for me, since the world background and such are established largely through narration in the first chapter, making it a bit hard for me to really immediately immerse myself. Also, there are some issues with comma splicing as well as using commas instead of semicolons. Stability of Updates (5/5): Not much to be said. Story Development (4.5/5 --> rounded to 5/5): The 0.5 was docked from writing quality instead and factored into there. As I mentioned before, a lot of initial exposition is directly stated instead of gradually revealed. I did, however, notice that things later took a different turn. Character Design (5/5): Seems generally well thought out. World Background (4.5/5 --> Rounded up to 5/5): Although I was a bit hesitant initially, descriptions from later chapters did convince me otherwise! Overall, great job! I'm not super familiar with the background, so I probably didn't pick up on a lot of important details, but I could still appreciate the thought you put into it!

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