Review Detail of GibberishDude in My Vampire System

I think this book has a very interesting and unique storyline. It kept me wanting more during most of the chapters. The characters have personalities that aren't all the same, so that's a good thing. The story developed pretty well in my opinion as well. My only complaint is there are lots of grammar/punctuation mistakes. The story is still readable, though, so it's mostly okay. Keep it up, author!