Review Detail of 8Eight in My Vampire System
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It's okay I guess? Let's start with characters because thats what I hate the most. As you can imagine when you don't really enjoy the cast it becomes pretty hard to read. The Mc, he is very forgettable. He is a bullied orphan. So you would assume he is fairly mature and strong willed, and at the start it does look that way. But that very quickly falls flat as he gets to military school (we will talk about this later) where he picks up to of the most annoying sidekicks I've seen in a while and he just goes with the flow, he never thinks critically about anything and feels like a pushover. And it doesn't really help with how bipolar he is, he switches mood and tone far too often him to establish a base personality Anyway moving on The ability copy guy, he is noticeable, noticeably annoying, clingy split personality he screams red flags but our Mc just goes with it. Feels like a guy straight out of a bl novel (it's not but the point still stands) Peter i probably remember this guy's name because I had a classmate with the same name and spineless personality, this type of. Character just pisses me off, and he is the best written one which just annoy me even more. This character is well made from a writing standpoint. The girl, she is fairly well put together, we know a bit about what she likes and he general personality, has some strong opinions about ability copy guy. So she feels believable That should be enough rant about characters The story plot/progression So far its pretty good, I have some gripes with how fighting is handled and how some things are made to be bigger problems than they really are and some things are just quietly glossed over all in all fairly good The world The world has some interesting things, but it also makes no sense what so ever, I would rather be in a 18-1900 mental asylum than be at that "military" school this world should have collapsed on itself already. The school mass produces egocentric sociopaths with assembly line efficiency The way this school runs is literally a 101 on how to breed extremists You know how we meme about martial arts novels being unforgiving, they got nothing on this novel. Writing and updates a pretty solid tho Its a decent enough novel, I can overlook the world, but the cast makes it a chore for me to read Best of luck with your novel bud
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normally i would agree, and usually im not one to complain about the world building very much. but this novel specifically atleast for the school dosent even follow some very very basic human psychology. i think why i complain so much about it. is it is labeled as a "military" school, and not an asylum. atleast in warhammer 40k guardsmen are taught loyalty and discipline which is alot more than i can say for this novel then again, maybe i care too much
CommanderSox:I agree with you that the MC needs a bit of work but I think you're being a bit harsh about the world. It's fantasy after all, does it really need to follow real life rules if it suppose the plot and character development?
It's one of the less logical, relatable world building I had seen in a while... a military school which is made out of the convenience for the school and training arc but would not work no mater how hard you tried, too soft and undisciplined, too unforgiving and careless to be military, at most it is even less credible then a xanxia novel sect... Reviews express the experience someone had with the novel, they don't have to be pleasing, but informative and sincere.
CommanderSox:I agree with you that the MC needs a bit of work but I think you're being a bit harsh about the world. It's fantasy after all, does it really need to follow real life rules if it suppose the plot and character development?
SkywardTaco:You have to give it more time. Let the characters get some progression. If you've read more of it then maybe update your review
I agree with you. Usually, stories with protagonists who act like this are the fault of the author's incomplete character development. They don't know how to develop the protagonist anymore so what do they do? They either nerf the heck out of the protagonist or change their personality completely in order for him or her to, "develop" as the story gets longer. This is quite common in the writing world. Unless they specifically show how the character had changed, such as being influenced by peace or friendship, just know that they are running out of ideas for how to develop their character more. I understand that it is quite annoying, but writing takes a lot of mental stress and planning. For authors who are genuinely serious about their story of course. Not those, "Court Death!" kind. You know what I mean?
try reading Lord of Mysteries, Throne of Arcana, Warlock in the Magus World or any completed books and you'll see for yourself how world building is essential to the story, basically it adds emersion and detail on the world MC lives and how the people lives.
CommanderSox:I agree with you that the MC needs a bit of work but I think you're being a bit harsh about the world. It's fantasy after all, does it really need to follow real life rules if it suppose the plot and character development?