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TheDevilYouKnow
TheDevilYouKnowAuthor3yrTheDevilYouKnow

Please leave a comment on anything you think could be improved. be its writing style, grammar, story direction, chapter-length or pacing. This is the first thing I have written (typed out) since secondary education English years ago.

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A Dreamer's Journey

TheDevilYouKnow

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QuidSevilla
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Hi, can we do a swap review? I'll genuinely read your story and will drop a review as soon as possible. Hoping you can drop a review too on my work: The Last Dragon Hunter https://***.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/THE-LAST-DRAGON-HUNTER

TheDevilYouKnow
TheDevilYouKnowAuthorTheDevilYouKnow

Will do.

QuidSevilla:Hi, can we do a swap review? I'll genuinely read your story and will drop a review as soon as possible. Hoping you can drop a review too on my work: The Last Dragon Hunter https://***.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/THE-LAST-DRAGON-HUNTER
TheDevilYouKnow
TheDevilYouKnowAuthorTheDevilYouKnow

Gonna be a while though, sorry just writing up the 4000 words I need to rank.

QuidSevilla:Hi, can we do a swap review? I'll genuinely read your story and will drop a review as soon as possible. Hoping you can drop a review too on my work: The Last Dragon Hunter https://***.webnovel.com/book/16708176405923905/THE-LAST-DRAGON-HUNTER
QuidSevilla
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No worries, same here 🤗

TheDevilYouKnow:Gonna be a while though, sorry just writing up the 4000 words I need to rank.
ShadowMoonDragon
ShadowMoonDragonLv5ShadowMoonDragon

Make the firekeeper his main female companion he should userp the flame through a magic method of sacrifice that needs a firekeeper with eyes to basically become a psuedo familiar and use it to bring her with like a sort of human elemental existance that can stay with him 24/7 and due to the morals of the bloodsouls verse she basically enables him to flings but she must be his true love.

TheDevilYouKnow
TheDevilYouKnowAuthorTheDevilYouKnow

That would breach my personal rule of this not having a harem even if its only 2 members, the MC had near-perfect foster parents and want a love like theirs. there's also the fact that the firekeeper is probably hundreds of years old, there will be a romance of some sort later on but the people of the dark soul's world are, how should I put it, truly undead there is no will left for such things.

ShadowMoonDragon:Make the firekeeper his main female companion he should userp the flame through a magic method of sacrifice that needs a firekeeper with eyes to basically become a psuedo familiar and use it to bring her with like a sort of human elemental existance that can stay with him 24/7 and due to the morals of the bloodsouls verse she basically enables him to flings but she must be his true love.
ShadowMoonDragon
ShadowMoonDragonLv5ShadowMoonDragon

It's fine I stopped caring when I decided to drop it at the spacetime god reveal bit, no offense, hope your novel does good and is how you like just not my cup of tea peace out.

TheDevilYouKnow:That would breach my personal rule of this not having a harem even if its only 2 members, the MC had near-perfect foster parents and want a love like theirs. there's also the fact that the firekeeper is probably hundreds of years old, there will be a romance of some sort later on but the people of the dark soul's world are, how should I put it, truly undead there is no will left for such things.