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S1MPLE
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Never had the account, created literally just for this novel, because I could not anymore. Writting Quality is 2/5 for me, I guess it could go to 2,5 but that is at best, and only on select chapters. There are a lot of grammar mistakes, I would recommend for author to get a proofreader, since you said, that you spent a lot of time thinking for a plot which you enjoy writting, you should also want for others to enjoy reading it. And writting quality which reminds me of google translate, just takes it away from me. In the begining I was just telling myself, that at some point, it's gonna get better, tried to rethink every sentence in my head for it to sound better, but after 45 chapters, I just can't anymore. The concept of a story is interesting and engaging, so I don't have any complaints about that, it is not unique, but it is original, so it's 5/5 from me. Character design is 3/5, average I would say, to be honest I don't understand how mc brains work at all. He experienced literal hell on Earth, which for most kids/teenagers would lead straight to death, no joke. He doesnt have any goals, no dreams, but somehow he still has attachment to Earth, which in critical moments on the journey allows him to power up and endure the pressure of death and conquer it, which doesnt make sense at all to me. Why would he want to go back to Earth, if he doesnt have any good memories of it. And he doesnt want revenge, so that leaves even less reason for it. Well I guess I will never know, because I will drop it at chapter 45. For World Background, I rated 4/5, I would of rated it 3, but since I didnt finish the novel I can't, because it might be explained later on. But in the earliest chapters there is almost nothing, whispers at least, rumours at best. Nothing solid. So for those of you who can endure bad grammar, it should be worth a try, after all you can't know how something tastes if you never tried eating it, it's not for me, but it might be for you. P.S I don't really believe there is only 11 reviews on this novel, which is read by 470k people, so if my comment dissapears, Im gonna save it just in case, and gonna post it again.

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30-Night Journeys

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JhiThan_Ser
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Thanks for the honest review! I just learned a different view in your review. You are right. And honestly, I am greatly aware of my grammar. I just write every detail in one sentence but when I write, I don't notice it. When I proofread it, put it on word and grammarly, it's kind of disappointing for me. But I write slow, very slow so I don't have time to rewrite it. Although my speed is improving I guess. I'm trying to break that habit. And for the MC goal, it's not laid out and that's my fault. It is already explained in the early chapters but I guess it's too vague and indirect. So yeah, thanks for the help!

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Yeah sometimes it's hard to understand your intentions, but I think that you've successfully woven many undertones and messages in this novel, even if they are hard to decipher sometimes.

JhiThan_Ser:Thanks for the honest review! I just learned a different view in your review. You are right. And honestly, I am greatly aware of my grammar. I just write every detail in one sentence but when I write, I don't notice it. When I proofread it, put it on word and grammarly, it's kind of disappointing for me. But I write slow, very slow so I don't have time to rewrite it. Although my speed is improving I guess. I'm trying to break that habit. And for the MC goal, it's not laid out and that's my fault. It is already explained in the early chapters but I guess it's too vague and indirect. So yeah, thanks for the help!