Review Detail of Moe_Cyan_Pile in MY LOVE, MY BABY

Good stuff I say good stuff. Although I was confused at the first chapter, especially at the dog......... Anyways character design, and world development is good. I'm a person that pays attention to details sorry. And this two above just needs a little tweaks, I anit sayin where since it's your novel, not mine. Ill let you discover it yourself. Story development so far is very nice. Not too much that, not too much this, just right. Overall, WELL DONE.