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Moe_Cyan_Pile
Moe_Cyan_PileLv35yr
2020-04-29 08:06

Good stuff I say good stuff. Although I was confused at the first chapter, especially at the dog......... Anyways character design, and world development is good. I'm a person that pays attention to details sorry. And this two above just needs a little tweaks, I anit sayin where since it's your novel, not mine. Ill let you discover it yourself. Story development so far is very nice. Not too much that, not too much this, just right. Overall, WELL DONE.

MY LOVE, MY BABY

Darlene_Virginia
4.5
293 Chs

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Darlene_Virginia
Darlene_VirginiaAuthor

Thanks for the review! I will try to check it once again, still trying to figure out how to convey what I feel into better words... Anyways, thank you once again!

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Oh My God! I did not expect the funny twist in the beginning😅! The writer was absolutely brilliant for having such a romantic comedy story. I expect more chapters to come!

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That was Good. In my collection now. First of all let me say this, I'm not good in romance works and especially love at first sight, I mean is that even a possible thing? For me if you kill someone that's reasonable but if you love someone from the first sight, I'm like why you did that? I always find romance confusing. Anyway So let's go with Synopsis, it's good, I mean look ..... "But here comes the twist, there are two heros and they look alike." There's twis and two heros here. Then there's kidnapping and going in search and underground. So even if I don't want to read it for romance, I have to read it for twists and turns as well as comedy, I didn't want to miss a unique story like this one. And I can say I didn't regret it, I'm still at chapter 12 but gonna read it more. Good Job author, I'm waiting for the new chapter, once I read all of it , so please keep writing.

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RiriHeart
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Honestly, I didn't expect the big twist. The opening was like a romance and a friendship story about University students. So when the story turned to kidnapping and action, I was surprised yet it caught my interest. The plot is quite captivating. Thumbs Up, Author.

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MokouFriedChicken
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Well that escalated quickly. Grammar has minimal errors, nothing another once through won't fix. Dialogue can feel unnatural at times. Try imagining yourself in their shoes: would you talk like that? If so, then write that down. Over all a remarkable effort. Keep on writing 👍

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Tbh, I don't like romance. But the beginning itself changed rapidly enough for my tiny attention span to stay focused. In general, the pace of the novel is fast enough for me and a good novel if I exclude my genre biase.

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