This story is a fairly good one that I won’t mind following. The problems it has is in grammar, spelling, and the flow of the story. There are numerous occasions where the POV seems to fluctuate between first and third with the occasional second person story telling. There are also an enormous amount of mistakes when it comes to gender, constantly switching between calling characters he him etc.. only to switch to her. Worth a read for sure but the quality is simply awful to the point some paragraphs will be total nonsense that is impossible to follow.
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