Review Detail of mrmrcia in Cultivation Fever

I'm quite disappointed with Oscar, character-wise. He didn't try to improve his lifestyle at the outset, yet had the guts to ask about what his family would think if he suddenly disappeared. Yeah right, Oscar, you should've asked that question to yourself instead of towards Sirius. Then, without qualms, he agreed to go with Sirius sans actually thinking apropos the repercussions. Though he made me wheeze at the "baby steps, baby steps" part, what an actual baby. Helga is my favourite character by the way. I beg of you to let her appear more. :(( I truly appreciate that you took your time in describing the scenery, the events, and the minor details. Some authors tend to use just adjectives, and that frustrates me more than anything else. A cheers to you. [[[ You'll hate me if you read this. Please don't.]]] I am not well-versed with the world of cultivation, and I know that some of your future readers also won't be. Hence, it was a tad difficult to follow through with the actual process of cultivation. A lot of named techniques were not elaborated, so I didn't know of their main purpose. As a suggestion, please phrase it out like we're learning along with Oscar. (I'm quite stupid, so please pardon my obliviousness.) There are minimal grammar mistakes. Minimal at best, but they somehow cut off the flow of some passages or hastens it. I noticed several punctuations misuse, overuse, and absence. However, as I've mentioned, the mistakes are minimal and can be easily proofread. Our grasp of the English grammar is not perfect :) I have a feeling that this " 'Soul becoming world' constitution" would appear again, for some reason. You have a very explicit way of narrating what's in your imagination. Very much appreciated. I'll be cheering you on. Sorry if I was of no help!