Review Detail of Revy_Loves_Kittys in I am wet DADDY!!!

Over all, it’s good. You should get an editor, there is quite a lot of grammar in each chapter, I’d say that you should say what the characters look like and put more detail into the rooms and world and stuff. It’s pretty good, you just need more detail, and you should reread the chapter before you publish the chapters each time because I saw a lot of grammar.