Review Detail of Hentai_Senchou in Fairy Tail: Djinn Take Over [COMPLETED]

Not to mention that the milf that already has a kid, ur, blushed extremely hard and was too embarrassed to kiss him even though she loves him and confessed to him a while ago. Every girl other than the goddess has the exact same personality. And that's only because the goddess is a cheap woman that married the protagonist just because he saw her panties and doesn't get embarrassed. They always blush when they do something intimate. Erza still blushes when they kiss without tongue even though she had loud sex in the bathroom, yelling "Oh god yes! Fu<k me harder!" When she knows two other girls are outside of the bathroom listening. Every single girl only has the personality traits of being way too shy, and way too accepting of a harem. Even outside of those moments, which is 90% of the time, they're nothing like the original characters. It's like they're all one girl that's using shadow clones and transformation jutsu to make the mc look like he has a harem

Good observation this is actually Naruto but since jutsus are overrated I named them magic oh yeah.....

It was an analogy about how 1 dimensional and similar the characters are.... If it wasn't obvious enough with me using the names of characters from fairy tail.

Hahaha.... No problem I am trying my best to write and make it work. Well I cannot please everyone and everyone has their own liking

I just so happen to not like stories where every single bit of character and relationship development is done off screen because the author is incapable of writing It. For literally every girl, it's "He meets them, time skip, the girls love him, asks them out."

I told you no problem everyone has their own opinion and likes

It's not about liking it or not. The characterization, one of the 5 aspects that you review the story based on, is the lowest score that there could possibly be. It doesn't even deserve 1 star. This isn't me trying to sh!t on your story, this is me trying to let you know that it isn't about preferences. I've read and enjoyed a lot of quick romance stories. This is about the quality of the writing itself, and it's something you should strive to improve in on in the future

Thanks bro. I dodge d a bullet from this one

Ye was about to say the same before I saw your comment I mean the writer even made a seperate chapter at one point defending the romance... I literally felt he went on a harem romance template site and copy pasted then added character names, cause the romance boils down to I love you, oh btw I have a harem, join it and the girl jumps to ****

TNT_Subho99- I think he was being sarcastic (the username mentioned)

same

Nyahaha..thank you for the reminder. You save my time there bro

Ty... But, like can there be a fanfic that is not retarded with retarded characters? with retarded time skips that skip the most important part? Like im looking at all the popular completed fanfics currently, and the top reviews show all the retarded things in it that i can't possibly bother to even try read it. Like is there anything to read on this site?

Rebirth in a magical world. It's harry potter with original characters and villains. Has the best character development and interactions on this website. (my review is the most liked on this one, so i might be biased) The wound in the stars. Star wars: Wrath of the force. Both star wars, though the first one has more timeskips between main events. Still shows what important things the mc did in that time.

I'll try rebirth one. And the wound in the stars is good, i read that one. I dropped it after he magically (off screen) got a wife, but everything else was good.