Review Detail of MokouFriedChicken in The blood prince

Interesting start. Grammar could use some work. Capitalization is missing in some parts and some sentences are missing a linking verb or two. Prose would drasticlly improve with grammar, as well as using more descriptive words. Dialogue is fine, so long as the grammar of them improves. I might suggest that you use a "said" replacement cheat sheet to add some more spice to the dialogue, as wellas swapping the Prologue and World Info chapters for more consisteny. Over all a very remarkable effort. Keep on writing 👍