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Ok so the story starts out as a transmigration with a system to ancient Poland. It's a good idea but the way it works out and is pretty boring and the main drawn of the system is barely used and not even defined. Right now we know barely anything about the system. There is no info on how he levels if there are levels, we know he gets xp from crafting but I guess no xp when he kills anyone we dont know his stats but we know he has them. The whole system thing is laid out like a wiki, it gives him info and that's about it oh and it can auto brew. It is supposed to be able to craft for him but he never uses it but to make beer. I mean what is the use of a system if he doesn't use it or hell the author never defines what it actually is or what it can do totally or what ways he can get xp. So ya the system to me is just a hook to get people that like them to the story and just enough to seem like there is a system. Just a few chapters in the romance entanglement starts which is crazy. The guy knows he only has a few months before the king runs away and all heck breaks loose and instead of setting stuff up thoroughly he spends 100 chapters play romance politics, yes het gets 2 towns out of it but damn 100 chapters of it and he has just made 1 brewery. I swear the author wants to have sex with his horse, he spends so much time describing the horse and putting his head to the horses you are just waiting from him to kiss the beast and way to much sex chapters for this type of story, I mean like 4 chapters to explain smut. Anyway the story is a disappointment and it's about to go premium. I wish the guy luck but i dont think many readers will hang around, in my opinion it's not worth paying for. The guy puts a lot of work and research in but for what its supposed to be it's just disappointment.
Road to the Crown
MotivatedSloth
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First thing first, thanks for a detailed review! But before I even comment on it, if you feel like this novel doesn't deserve five, or even four stars, feel free to rate it lower. I already deleted quite a lot of 5-star spam reviews, but just like I pointed out in the aux chapters - I'm not going to treat real reviews unfairly. As for the review - I think the problem here is that you assumed that the system would be the focal point of the story. While I can't blame you for it, as everyone approaches a novel with their own expectations, I never claimed that this would be purely a system novel. Yes, there is a system in this novel and it holds now and will hold great importance in the future, but with how down-to-the-ground I want to make this novel (otherwise I wouldn't pay any mind to all those fine details that eat away on my writing time, duh), using the system like those reckless protagonists from most of the system novels do, would mean giving up on the most important quality of this book - realism. With no ambiguous magic in place to give any rational explanation for the MC exploits, one needs to be insanely careful for what he is doing and how one goes about it. Just like you pointed out, so far, the system only contributed directly by crafting the beer. But keep in mind that before popularising this bear almost anywhere, MC already had to make sure he could produce it by himself, just in case anyone asked him how he made it. That was also the reason why he didn't use system to craft steam engines - he would have no way of explaining how he did so. As for the lack of the information about the system - with how little MC knows about it (and with this novel kept in the first person narration) unless something happens for him to learn more about how his system works, he can only use what he has on hand. And I already made the mistake of making the system too obvious for the readers, instead of keeping it a mystical tool of unknown origin. Overall, I think the greatest problem lies in fact, that you came seeking system novel with kingdom-building, while this one is a kingdom-building novel with a system :D
Sorry for late reply. The reason I gave the stars I did is because I can tell you researched your butt off for this story and you enjoy it. Beside the content everything else is good, that's why it's not 5 stars but for the rest you did well.
MotivatedSloth:First thing first, thanks for a detailed review! But before I even comment on it, if you feel like this novel doesn't deserve five, or even four stars, feel free to rate it lower. I already deleted quite a lot of 5-star spam reviews, but just like I pointed out in the aux chapters - I'm not going to treat real reviews unfairly. As for the review - I think the problem here is that you assumed that the system would be the focal point of the story. While I can't blame you for it, as everyone approaches a novel with their own expectations, I never claimed that this would be purely a system novel. Yes, there is a system in this novel and it holds now and will hold great importance in the future, but with how down-to-the-ground I want to make this novel (otherwise I wouldn't pay any mind to all those fine details that eat away on my writing time, duh), using the system like those reckless protagonists from most of the system novels do, would mean giving up on the most important quality of this book - realism. With no ambiguous magic in place to give any rational explanation for the MC exploits, one needs to be insanely careful for what he is doing and how one goes about it. Just like you pointed out, so far, the system only contributed directly by crafting the beer. But keep in mind that before popularising this bear almost anywhere, MC already had to make sure he could produce it by himself, just in case anyone asked him how he made it. That was also the reason why he didn't use system to craft steam engines - he would have no way of explaining how he did so. As for the lack of the information about the system - with how little MC knows about it (and with this novel kept in the first person narration) unless something happens for him to learn more about how his system works, he can only use what he has on hand. And I already made the mistake of making the system too obvious for the readers, instead of keeping it a mystical tool of unknown origin. Overall, I think the greatest problem lies in fact, that you came seeking system novel with kingdom-building, while this one is a kingdom-building novel with a system :D
Sorry for late reply. The reason I gave the stars I did is because I can tell you researched your butt off for this story and you enjoy it. Beside the content everything else is good, that's why it's not 5 stars but for the rest you did well.
MotivatedSloth:First thing first, thanks for a detailed review! But before I even comment on it, if you feel like this novel doesn't deserve five, or even four stars, feel free to rate it lower. I already deleted quite a lot of 5-star spam reviews, but just like I pointed out in the aux chapters - I'm not going to treat real reviews unfairly. As for the review - I think the problem here is that you assumed that the system would be the focal point of the story. While I can't blame you for it, as everyone approaches a novel with their own expectations, I never claimed that this would be purely a system novel. Yes, there is a system in this novel and it holds now and will hold great importance in the future, but with how down-to-the-ground I want to make this novel (otherwise I wouldn't pay any mind to all those fine details that eat away on my writing time, duh), using the system like those reckless protagonists from most of the system novels do, would mean giving up on the most important quality of this book - realism. With no ambiguous magic in place to give any rational explanation for the MC exploits, one needs to be insanely careful for what he is doing and how one goes about it. Just like you pointed out, so far, the system only contributed directly by crafting the beer. But keep in mind that before popularising this bear almost anywhere, MC already had to make sure he could produce it by himself, just in case anyone asked him how he made it. That was also the reason why he didn't use system to craft steam engines - he would have no way of explaining how he did so. As for the lack of the information about the system - with how little MC knows about it (and with this novel kept in the first person narration) unless something happens for him to learn more about how his system works, he can only use what he has on hand. And I already made the mistake of making the system too obvious for the readers, instead of keeping it a mystical tool of unknown origin. Overall, I think the greatest problem lies in fact, that you came seeking system novel with kingdom-building, while this one is a kingdom-building novel with a system :D