Review Detail of TomGutshall in dust to dust ashes to ashes this is dropped sigh

Item: dust to dust ashes to ashes this is dropped sigh
Rating: 3.4

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TomGutshallLv13yrTomGutshall

Your story is a bit generic. However there were some fun scenes. The biggest flaw is that you seem to be rushing from one action scene to the next. If the story took place in the modern world, this would be fine. However there is not enough exposition for us to figure out what is going on. Your story is mediocre at best, and unreadable at the very worst.

dust to dust ashes to ashes this is dropped sigh

Lazy_leon

Liked it!

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TomGutshallLv1TomGutshall

You can't really expect someone to read more than 2 or 3 chapters of a so-so story before giving up and reading something else. Polish your beginning. Polish until you think you couldn't possibly continue to polish, (even though you probably still could)

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3yr

TomGutshallLv1TomGutshall

No, I read about the first 15 chapters, because that's what I had time for. I also really enjoyed most of what I did read. I'm just saying that there are parts that were hard to get through, and if you cleaned those up you would have a better retention rate.

3yr