Review Detail of Breno_Ranyere in The Tylingariea Epic

Thank you for reading the book, i hope you enloyed and will contue to read it and thank you for the review and the input as well

I have reread the review and i am just a little confused and what you are telling might be right and i would need to do something about it but could you explean to me what you mean about there being to much plot at the beginging and very little character at the start. if it is something that is within reason to change i would look into changing it i would just like to know what you are trying to say i am not upset about the commot i just would like to know how to make my book better so that everyone will enjoy it thank you have a nice day. Brandon gould

It's kinda hard to explain and I am by no means an expert so feel free to completely disregard anything said here... To me, plot moments are when all you see are pieces of the story moving. This character went here, this character went there, this thing happened, and then this thing happened. It's a wikipedia page. Character moments are when we get some time with the characters just being themselves. Like... character went here, and that made him feel this way, character went there, and that made him react that way, thing happened, which lead character to say this, and then this thing happened, which lead this character to do this because of that reason. Its basically when the reader starts to learn how the character works which gives him a reason to care about him. A lot of the first part is dedicated to these characters's worlds ending, but i wasn't invested enough because i barely knew these people yet. Lets take the cliche and mention Lord of the rings. The two heroes find out that they need to bring a ring from point A to point B to stop the war. This is plot. Doesn't matter who the character is. Along the way they meet a weird creature that tries to create a rift among them. This is character. Only this creature in particular could provide this development, because we see why he is doing what he's doing. Like i said, it's hard to explain, and maybe i just missed something, but i wish i could have gotten to know these people a tad more so i can sympathize with their situation.