Read the first page. The rest of the 'book' has the same quality. The author doesn’t need a proofreader, she needs an English teacher. And a few years to grow up. Obviously a child’s work who has never even been kissed but tries to write ***** content. The story idea would might pass but the overall quality is well... can't put it nicely so won’t comment on it further. And no, English isn't my first language either but even I can see average 10 spelling and grammar mistakes in every 2 sentences. Advice for the author: learn English and grow up. Also try to read a couple of real books before trying to write. Then try to rewrite the whole thing and always read through all of your chapters before sharing it. Sorry for being honest but you will never improve if someone doesn’t make you face harsh reality.
Titu_Thatal
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LIKEI absolutely agree with you and have left my own review suggesting the author get an editor/proofreader and rewrite their characters since they're not at all likeable and the FL acts like a child more so than a college student who's also working to support her family. However, while critiques are good to help people improve, I don't think there's any reason to be so mean about it. That's all I'll say.