Review Detail of InternetSaint in Re: Akimichi
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This story is okayish to read until chapter 45, beyond that there is a lot of cringe and the story seem to lose steam. ..............................
Re: Akimichi
Don_Paw
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I have a bad track record doing that. Every author I gave my ideas so far wrote themselves into a corner. Not sure if that is because the only author's asking for that are bound to write themselves into a corner or if that is my fault. But sure here have some ideas. The story seem to lack direction, so either introduce a huge war, drama, sudden loss, naruto for example coping over the death of some genin and growing and changing as a character, something like that. Or somehow end the story by prematurely canceling Kaguya's Resurrection on accident and doing some time skips and continuing this story as crossover by having the MC somehow grain the OP power to cross the multiverse on accident. Thus continuing the story as a non serious crack story where he just plays lovely dovely couple with ino while beating everyone as an afterthought. Or go for the happy family route (something new), let the MC marry Ino young, have some challenging missions followed by the MC and Ino moving into the same house and ino retiring from duty for a while and popping out some kids. Sakura doing the same with Lee later. The MC bragging and annoying Shikamaru with his kids and the naruto main story continuing in the background. The focus being romance and raising his kids. Maybe even taking on a genin team and doing missions with them.
Don_Paw:I won't call it wrong tho, I often got writer block and a lack of inspiration. No one giving me any suggestion and got stressed irl... Please do tell any suggestion that might improve this story. Thanks for the review~
On a positive note, that scene where the MC and Ino go on a date and he says "your hand looks heavy let me hold that for you" or something to that effect, that scene was gold and made me laugh. I hope that was original.
Don_Paw:I won't call it wrong tho, I often got writer block and a lack of inspiration. No one giving me any suggestion and got stressed irl... Please do tell any suggestion that might improve this story. Thanks for the review~
InternetSaint:I have a bad track record doing that. Every author I gave my ideas so far wrote themselves into a corner. Not sure if that is because the only author's asking for that are bound to write themselves into a corner or if that is my fault. But sure here have some ideas. The story seem to lack direction, so either introduce a huge war, drama, sudden loss, naruto for example coping over the death of some genin and growing and changing as a character, something like that. Or somehow end the story by prematurely canceling Kaguya's Resurrection on accident and doing some time skips and continuing this story as crossover by having the MC somehow grain the OP power to cross the multiverse on accident. Thus continuing the story as a non serious crack story where he just plays lovely dovely couple with ino while beating everyone as an afterthought. Or go for the happy family route (something new), let the MC marry Ino young, have some challenging missions followed by the MC and Ino moving into the same house and ino retiring from duty for a while and popping out some kids. Sakura doing the same with Lee later. The MC bragging and annoying Shikamaru with his kids and the naruto main story continuing in the background. The focus being romance and raising his kids. Maybe even taking on a genin team and doing missions with them.
InternetSaint:On a positive note, that scene where the MC and Ino go on a date and he says "your hand looks heavy let me hold that for you" or something to that effect, that scene was gold and made me laugh. I hope that was original.
Don_Paw:nice idea, I'm gonna try to think this through. thanks for your suggestion, and stay healthy!