Review Detail of Thereviewer48 in The Verlusian Conspiracy
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Writing Quality: 3/5 The grammar needs work in the wording, punctuation, and I saw one space problem. Other than that, your style isn't bad. Updating Quality: 5/5 I put that for everyone. Story Development: 4/5 You pace your story really well, and the transitions are good too. I like your plot. Character Design: 4/5 I enjoy your characters, they are refreshing, although I still feel a slight detachment from them, that could just be me. World Background: 4/5 Not bad at all, you give enough information to build a picture of your world and what to expect. Fixing your wording would make it better.
The Verlusian Conspiracy
Allen_Clay012
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Thank you so much for this review! I hastily updated this story in the early parts, from chapters 1 to 20. The story was originally voiced in 1st person and I decided to convert it to 3rd midway. The editing was hastily done too that's why I was not able to spot some mistakes. Also, the R-18 scene was rather symbolic than erotic. I do not know if I was able to portray it well. Anyways, I will try to improve the issues that is mentioned. Thank you once again for reading and the review for my work. The TradeMaker
Allen_Clay012:Thank you so much for this review! I hastily updated this story in the early parts, from chapters 1 to 20. The story was originally voiced in 1st person and I decided to convert it to 3rd midway. The editing was hastily done too that's why I was not able to spot some mistakes. Also, the R-18 scene was rather symbolic than erotic. I do not know if I was able to portray it well. Anyways, I will try to improve the issues that is mentioned. Thank you once again for reading and the review for my work. The TradeMaker
Thereviewer48:You're welcome and I see. Also I skipped the r18 scenes so I cannot tell you anything đ