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AxlSLLLv24yr
2020-10-31 10:04

Interesting characters, the plot flows with grace and a very capturating setting. You did a good job portraying the grim touch so natural to the story. You definitely need to work with the grammar, it can make some parts awkward to read. But overall this is a solid, good work that has no trouble hooking readers. Good job.

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Allen_Clay012
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Thank you very much! I will fix my issues about my grammar. I appreciate your review and thank you for the tips.

Allen_Clay012
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Thank you for your review! I'm glad you appreciated my story despite of its flaws. I will try my best to improve both the story and the issues mentioned.

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