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3.8/5. The grammar isn't bad, but it can have some improvement. There's no need for commas after certain words. For example, in the beginning it says somewhere along the lines of, "Laid on the (something), was an unconscious boy." There is no need for the comma before was. Think of the sentence in your head, replacing the comma with a pause and see if it makes sense. There's also the fact that it's highly unlikely for time magic not to have been discovered yet. I won't delve too deeply into that, though. Also, you seem to use asterisks (*) instead of apostrophes ('). I don't know if it's a design choice, but it gets rather annoying. I usually only see those in poorly written fanfictions on AO3 and FF. I'd change it ASAP. Won't comment on the plot until the story progresses to at least chapter 50.

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