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Dayside
DaysideLv125yr
2020-03-17 16:38

I'm sorry for writing a review without even reading the thing, but the most important part is to first make a decent description. Please for the love of god fix the grammar in the description or no one will give it a try.

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Hana_Frederica
Hana_FredericaAuthor

decent description? do you mean that the description is too long? what part do you mean to fix? please give more detail explanation

Dayside
DaysideLv12

I very clearly said nothing about the length, that part is fine. The thing I took issue with is the grammar of the description, it's filled with incorrect words. It's a huge turn off.

Hana_Frederica:decent description? do you mean that the description is too long? what part do you mean to fix? please give more detail explanation
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

But I still read it and so did others . She has scope for improvement yes , at the end of the day it’s still her first work . I think you need to provide your opinion in a better man or for the love of god you will hurt a lot of people even if you meant it in a good way .

Dayside
DaysideLv12

While, yes there will be people who read it despite the flaw that really bugged me, it's constructive criticism.

liufenlei:But I still read it and so did others . She has scope for improvement yes , at the end of the day it’s still her first work . I think you need to provide your opinion in a better man or for the love of god you will hurt a lot of people even if you meant it in a good way .
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I get what you mean and what your intentions were However my point is that someone who has shared their work for some time , your words no one will read it , might seem harsh . I understand how bugging it can be but I just wanted to say we should be careful with our words as some people can’t handle it that well

Dayside:While, yes there will be people who read it despite the flaw that really bugged me, it's constructive criticism.
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I get what you mean and what your intentions were However my point is that someone who has shared their work for some time , your words no one will read it , might seem harsh . I understand how bugging it can be but I just wanted to say we should be careful with our words as some people can’t handle it that well

Dayside:While, yes there will be people who read it despite the flaw that really bugged me, it's constructive criticism.
_eunwa
_eunwaLv4

The writing in the book is pretty bad too for a novel that takes a long time to update. I'm pretty sure they have a long, long time editing the chapters, yeah?

_eunwa
_eunwaLv4

It just serves as a warning for people like me who get bothered by such things. Helps us from getting more disappointed after reading the book

liufenlei:I get what you mean and what your intentions were However my point is that someone who has shared their work for some time , your words no one will read it , might seem harsh . I understand how bugging it can be but I just wanted to say we should be careful with our words as some people can’t handle it that well
_eunwa
_eunwaLv4

It just serves as a warning for people who get bothered or doesn't really like books like this. There is a room for improvement but as of now? It just saves us from wasting our time and getting really disappointed after reading the book and seeing that

liufenlei:I get what you mean and what your intentions were However my point is that someone who has shared their work for some time , your words no one will read it , might seem harsh . I understand how bugging it can be but I just wanted to say we should be careful with our words as some people can’t handle it that well
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Sure , but my words weren’t asking her not to comment . I’m no one to tell her that , just that her words “ no one will try it “ was harsh for a new writer and those words were unnecessary . My point was for constructive criticism .

_eunwa:It just serves as a warning for people like me who get bothered by such things. Helps us from getting more disappointed after reading the book
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Sure , read it or you don’t read it . None of my business nor do I care - just that this comment was in the midst of a global pandemic where mental health is hitting an all time low and bitter words hurt . So if you want to keep that in mind , great and if you don’t want to keep it in mind - that’s just fine . It’s your choice .

_eunwa:It just serves as a warning for people who get bothered or doesn't really like books like this. There is a room for improvement but as of now? It just saves us from wasting our time and getting really disappointed after reading the book and seeing that
_eunwa
_eunwaLv4

The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"

liufenlei:Sure , read it or you don’t read it . None of my business nor do I care - just that this comment was in the midst of a global pandemic where mental health is hitting an all time low and bitter words hurt . So if you want to keep that in mind , great and if you don’t want to keep it in mind - that’s just fine . It’s your choice .
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I think you are forgetting 2 things . Basic decency and the fact how to read . It wasn’t written for you but fir her . Did I tell her not to write her comment ? No . I told her I understand what she is written but she should not write “ NO ONE WILL TRY IT “ . Do you understand basic english ? You don’t try it - okay . Does that mean no one is trying it ? No . This review helped you great . Did I say anything that was meant for you ? You wanted to give your two bits - go ahead . What has the pandemic do with this ? It’s clearly you not understanding that quarantine for some people is an unhealthy environment - shows your myopic and sheltered point of view - oh so well .

_eunwa:The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I think you are forgetting 2 things . Basic decency and the fact how to read . It wasn’t written for you but fir her . Did I tell her not to write her comment ? No . I told her I understand what she is written but she should not write “ NO ONE WILL TRY IT “ . Do you understand basic english ? You don’t try it - okay . Does that mean no one is trying it ? No . This review helped you great . Did I say anything that was meant for you ? You wanted to give your two bits - go ahead . What has the pandemic do with this ? It’s clearly you not understanding that quarantine for some people is an unhealthy environment - shows your myopic and sheltered point of view - oh so well .

_eunwa:The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I don’t care whether it was correct for you or not . Did I say I want to be correct - no . What I told her was simple hard facts . She said no one will try it - well no **** . Clearly people have read it . Is that clear enough for you ? I told her yes she is right - the grammar isn’t the best . Read the whole damn thing . Did I tell her not to write that ? No . It’s not even about you saying OMG so correct , it’s about the fact that you can’t read the entire whole comment someone has written . Also , it’s so damn sad someone has to bring the damn pandemic . No the pandemic isn’t the issue here - it’s the fact that her opinion talks about an audience she knows nothing about . You aren’t an entire audience , you are just a single person and even if 99% of the people think like you , guess what ? That doesn’t make it right . So she is no one to say no one will read it . You can’t say something nice , fine . You want to say something mean , say it . Your choice . But talk sense , can you ? Is that too much to ask ? The basic decency where someone is writing a new book and she can say a lot of people will not appreciate the book due to its sentence structure . The person who commented didn’t have an issue with what I said - if her review helped you- great .

_eunwa:The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

I don’t need excuses for anything . I literally don’t even know when this is for - I was simply asking her to say it in a better manner as her words can be discouraging to an author in any situation . The pandemic amplified a situation for a whole lot of people . It doesn’t matter whether you found me right or wrong - why do I need to give you excuses for anything ? I was trying to tell you what I was talking about since you clearly came out of nowhere saying stuff which I really didn’t understand how it had a correlation to what i said . Basic courtesy made me reply . But what in the ever loving world has given you this fantastical misconception that any virtual stranger can give two hoots about you - so much so that they bother to give you an “excuse” and care about what you say and that omg so correct . Do you even understand what an excuse is and in what context it’s used ?

liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Why would I care to evoke anything in a virtual stranger ??? I disagreed with what I said and voiced that , just the way you didn’t understand what was happening here and voiced what ever you wanted to say . However if you really want to say about generalising a statement with your “ Y’all “ , atleast understand the entire thing happening . Also do you seriously think the pandemic has nothing to do with everything happening right now ? The fact that I have the time to answer to your whimsical nonsense has all to do with the pandemic .

_eunwa:The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Also who is the us ? Who cares about the us ? Seriously , do explain what you want to say .

_eunwa:The hell does pandemic have to do with anything? Y'all seriously running out of excuses to make that you just go in with random stuff thinking that it'll evoke something that'd cause us to say "Omg that's so correct"
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Woah , i read it again to understand what you were talking on and I think you clearly didn’t read what I said . I said your words “ no one will read it “ was harsh for a new author and I agree with what you said otherwise . Get it ? Tell her to improve in a manner which is constructive , not in a manner which makes her stop wanting to write . This has been said by her further in the authors notes in the story , which was why I said it . Was I telling her not to write ? No . The description and the grammar is a problem - which is just fine . “ no one will read it “ - did that help you ? Did that form the basis for your opinion ? Was that clear enough for you ?

_eunwa:It just serves as a warning for people who get bothered or doesn't really like books like this. There is a room for improvement but as of now? It just saves us from wasting our time and getting really disappointed after reading the book and seeing that
liufenlei
liufenleiLv14

Yes because for people a review from a person who hasn’t even read a book helps , I actually read the entire conversation again and damn “ y’all really just come out of no where with your crap and think you are right and want others to say oH gOd yOu arE sO riGht

_eunwa:It just serves as a warning for people who get bothered or doesn't really like books like this. There is a room for improvement but as of now? It just saves us from wasting our time and getting really disappointed after reading the book and seeing that
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