Review Detail of Windreader8675 in Primordial Origin

Asides from grammer mistakes that is noticeable yet didn't hinder the story, the rest is pretty good. The plot is very interesting and the setting are very well build, as it is apparent with all that pages dedicated into explaining about the realms and the cultivation. The story is descriptive. For the dialogue, I don't really know why but it kind of give me a Shakespeare vibe. The mother and father seems a bit stiff despite the desciptions? Perhaps it is just the dialogue and the tone of the story making me felt this way. But I do like the personality of the mother and father. Great job, and keep on improving as you work! P.S. Recommend using Grammerly to help with the spelling if you don't really have the time to edit.