Review Detail of not_an_alien in Fenrir Rising (Rewriting)

Item: Fenrir Rising (Rewriting)
Rating: 3.8

Review detail

not_an_alienLv33yrnot_an_alien

The story is quite nice so far, but I can tell that the characters personalities need to be polished and improved. Theres also a bit too much world background, we should only know what fenrir knows. To sum it up, I think it has great potential but it needs to polished.

Fenrir Rising (Rewriting)

LupusDeus

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LupusDeusAuthorLupusDeus

The world background was a personal writing choice that I had made. Other than that, I agree with everything that you said about character development which I am trying to work on more.

3yr

not_an_alienLv3not_an_alien

Nice to see you're trying to improve the story. After that you might have to rewrite the first chapters to make this story even better.

LupusDeus:The world background was a personal writing choice that I had made. Other than that, I agree with everything that you said about character development which I am trying to work on more.

3yr