Review Detail of don_offl in The First Hero Origins

I read it till chapter 4, the story was pretty engaging and made me wanting for more, the writing was simple and plain so there was no difficulty in understanding the story... ill noticed the same mistakes I made in this novel also, the author is mostly telling rather than showing its not only my view I sent the link to my friend in writer's group and asked his opinion he said the same thing, the author need to describe a character's feelings about what they see before them what thoughts going on in their mind etc. other than this the story is unique, interesting and keep the reader hooked no doubt in that, this is a story that has the potential to reach next level since clearly the author has superb storytelling skills I think this will turn out to be a good novel