Review Detail of notyouorme2006 in Barbaric Ways
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The story definitely has good possibilities but unfortunately there are some issues regarding readability. There is a bit of rushing in regards to the progression of the story with it kinda feeling like the author is maybe running to the part they are most excited about. Another issue is what I guess would be formatting. There are parts of the story where there are not breaks in the dialogue so it turns into a giant run-on paragraph that can change character perspectives with no reason and little use of “ to determine speaking. Overall if the author maybe gets some one to do some light editing it could actually get pretty solid. Unfortunately as it stands it’s just pretty hard to read.
Barbaric Ways
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Yeah hope it didn’t come out as just overly critical. There is nothing worse than someone just saying it’s no good as opposed to at least giving ideas to help any issues. I don’t know if you were going for this style of perspective but it is very similar to Oukoku e Tsuzuku Michi. If you haven’t read it you may want to not so much for the contents of the story but the way the writer tells the story from the MCs view, just a thought
notyouorme2006:Yeah hope it didn’t come out as just overly critical. There is nothing worse than someone just saying it’s no good as opposed to at least giving ideas to help any issues. I don’t know if you were going for this style of perspective but it is very similar to Oukoku e Tsuzuku Michi. If you haven’t read it you may want to not so much for the contents of the story but the way the writer tells the story from the MCs view, just a thought
notyouorme2006:Yeah hope it didn’t come out as just overly critical. There is nothing worse than someone just saying it’s no good as opposed to at least giving ideas to help any issues. I don’t know if you were going for this style of perspective but it is very similar to Oukoku e Tsuzuku Michi. If you haven’t read it you may want to not so much for the contents of the story but the way the writer tells the story from the MCs view, just a thought