Review Detail of MoonTree in The Last Cipher [Paused]

Well the idea, the concept is very interesting, but the story seems like a joke, so I must assume that that was the idea or that it came up when you wrote the story, it is supposed to be a rewrite, well then my advice to you is a new rewrite, but get help or co-write with someone with more experience, because the idea is good and well developed, it could easily be one of the most viewed favorite fic ... of those who like HP and Gravity Falls