Review Detail of lordpickyreader in Dungeon System: World Of Chaos & War

I first started to read this novel awhile back, I was reading it while it was still updateing. I recently started to read this novel again, the story development is slow and isn't very interesting, I tryed to get past the parts that bothered me but the story is centered around a boring person with an awful personality. At fist I really liked the idea but the way the auther words the novel brothers me, he writes everything in the annoyingly negitive perspective of the character, because of this I often get annoyed and cringe at the attempts of the character acting "cool". overall it's a good idea but not done well, if the auther could rewrite the entire thing and focus on the quality it whould be better.