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Avatinius
AvatiniusLv64yr
2020-12-23 09:42

what can I say? the world is One Piece with no major changes at all. the main character decided to not follow the Straw Hats and travel with the heroine, but MC has done absolutely nothing in regards to plot till chapter 48 from where I am right now. spoiler alert. MC has done some stuff, but none of them has a lasting effect. He always goes and watches what the Straw Hats are doing, yet tells himself he won't join them. wtf, if the MC is gonna be so passive, either join Straw Hats or go to one of the Blues and not care about the plot. but, noo, the MC waits everywhere to look at Straw Hats and helps them at times, but not enough to change plot, no changes at all from original One Piece aside from Luffys Bounty, and I think the bounty of MC was first high, then author halved it or something in the later chapters, the MC of supposed 400m bounty isn't even a Supernova, like wtf. quality is decent, not the best. story development isn't good at all, follows the plot of an already made world and story. character design is stale and doesn't feel alive, not even the characters of One Piece people feel natural. world background, it's already of a world which is created by someone, nothing to say here. all in all, I tried reading this novel till chapter 48, but I couldn't continue. I personally didn't like how it was going since the start, but there might be people that might like it.

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StrayGod
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Finally!!! Someone that wants to open his mouth and tell me how he feels l. Yeah, I understand the thing with the story and not having changed anything, but it took me some time to understand that myself as none wanted to comment on anything and help me figure things out, so by the time I noticed shit I was already at 49ish chapter. Not that it's an excuse, but it's hard for me as an "author" to "develop"," evolve" or "learn" anything if I don't get some either healthy and good critique or some stupid 10-year-old complaining that this isn't Harem. So I thank you very much and I'm both glad and slightly saddened by your review, but it's very helpful for me. And I wish you the best and just want to say that volume 2 that's on the way will have us move away from the One Piece story for some time or so to say the 2 year time as MC will get into trouble in his paradise world he seems to live in. Again, Thank you 🙏 (Was that good or did you not understand anything I said, it's quite common of me to say shit people don't usually understand 100% 😓😭)

StrayGod
StrayGodAuthor

And I have wanted to change stuff, but you know when you get so far in it's hard to make any bigger changes for me without needing to remake it and that's actually something I have wanted to do, but unsure if it's a good thing. 😩

Avatinius
AvatiniusLv6

I'll keep my eyes open up for season 2, can't wait for it :) author, you're doing great, don't give up and continue to growing better at writing

StrayGod:Finally!!! Someone that wants to open his mouth and tell me how he feels l. Yeah, I understand the thing with the story and not having changed anything, but it took me some time to understand that myself as none wanted to comment on anything and help me figure things out, so by the time I noticed shit I was already at 49ish chapter. Not that it's an excuse, but it's hard for me as an "author" to "develop"," evolve" or "learn" anything if I don't get some either healthy and good critique or some stupid 10-year-old complaining that this isn't Harem. So I thank you very much and I'm both glad and slightly saddened by your review, but it's very helpful for me. And I wish you the best and just want to say that volume 2 that's on the way will have us move away from the One Piece story for some time or so to say the 2 year time as MC will get into trouble in his paradise world he seems to live in. Again, Thank you 🙏 (Was that good or did you not understand anything I said, it's quite common of me to say shit people don't usually understand 100% 😓😭)
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