Wow, I can see a lot of thought put into this. Synopsis: Probobly my only major fault. I think your synopsis can be reworked a tad bit to match your writing. Im not sure how but its not as smooth and gripping as when Im actually reading the story. Its not necessarily a bog deal, but might turn away people that judge a book by its cover. Grammar: Practically no errors except for tiny things here and there. Nothing made me reread anything and the descriptions were actually quite vivid throughout the story. The only thing I might add is to add a bit of detail to the characters, as I have a very hard time imagining them. Story: Honestly, no critique here. Everything is verse and it seems like it only adds to that the longer you read. There isn't bookloads of information to memorize and just enough to keep you going for more and more. The chapters are pretty long, and I 'd honestly recommend splitting them up to two different chapters so you can technically be uploading more. However, each chapter ends brilliantly and keeps you on your seat, so its completely up to the author. Very well done - Rating - 4.8/5 stars. Everything has 5 stars except for the stability of uploads, because, as I mentioned earlier, consider making chapters smaller but uploading more. Its more interesting for us readers that way. Or just my opinion, idk.
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