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2020-02-14 17:07

I really like this concept, the MC is not op and she has to work hard, Also there is not much angst but it is really quite refreshing. And now there are less grammatical mistakes, but still there is change to improvment.

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Thank you so much and yes I will try to improve as much as I can

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