I am frustrated. Author, your story has a really good opening plot wise, but the writing is horrible. I am wiling to edit the chapters for free. It actually hurts when I read an interesting story that is poorly written. What do you say?
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Ah, yes I know I have problem with writing :) But then, I really love to write my story even though I have many mistakes, I am just glad to finally let out those stories running rampant in my mind most of the time hahaha I am also grateful to my readers that keep reading it with all the errors I make, I really love you guys! And why would I refuse that wonderful offer of yours? :) Do you have discord? LoveableChubby#1263 we can chat more about it here if you are still interested :)
I completely agree... The writing is terrible... So bad, in fact, that i am questioning whether English is your native language or if you even wrote this novel at all and just translated another novel(poorly at that), and just gave it another name. I am not trying to question you, I am just baffled by the writing quality. My first advice would be to not give spoilers in your own stories in every single chapter(With every single character, you write about how they will feel, realize, or do something in the future that makes them think back on the current moment or They will be doing a lot of this moment in the future, etc.). It makes no sense, and instead of making the readers interested in the future of the plot, it makes us feel repetition and annoyance. Second, Stop repeating the exact same thing twice in every sentence by saying it slightly different. That is just a waste of your time and an annoyance to the readers. You learn this is elementary school. Make your paragraphs as efficient as possible, say what you mean once and end it, no repeating words, saying words with the same meaning right after each other, and no repeating sentences that mean the same thing. Also, you need some serious work on your grammar. I would only understand why you made all of these issues if you are still learning English, or if you just wrote everything in your Native language and used a bad translation program to translate it to English. I hope one of these is what is going on and not the forgery that i mentioned earlier. If you are really the Author of this novel, then i really do wish you the best in getting better at learning English, or using a better translation service. Your novel plot is interesting and worth reading, despite the struggle in reading it smoothly.
I agree, I couldn't go beyond chapter two ... a shame, the story seemed very interesting
