Review Detail of herbert in Reincarnation in One Piece: The Adventure of Ian Louis! [COMPLETE!]

I've noticed that the author has fallen into a "writing trap". It is very common for newer authors to get caught in a trap called summarizing. Instead of reading this fan-fic like a story, the reader is forced to read a "summary" of the story. Things like details are extremely important when writing, and can help fend off the summary-like atmosphere this story gives.