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Shameless author here ill be giving my book 5star... . . . . .. .. . . . . .. . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . ... ... . . . . . .. ..
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XxEagleNightxX
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ReincarnatedSaint:Hey, you should check you synopsis, its very confusing. I don't understand what you are trying to convey
ReincarnatedSaint:Hey, you should check you synopsis, its very confusing. I don't understand what you are trying to convey
Nah, I am not complaining, I am new author too. I just saw jumbled sentences and confusing phrases. So I just throught of pointing it out
XxEagleNightxX:Sorry but I don't really know how to put a synopsis, just bear with me okay Im still new
Nah, I am not complaining, I am new author too. I just saw jumbled sentences and confusing phrases. So I just throught of pointing it out
XxEagleNightxX:Sorry but I don't really know how to put a synopsis, just bear with me okay Im still new
ReincarnatedSaint:Nah, I am not complaining, I am new author too. I just saw jumbled sentences and confusing phrases. So I just throught of pointing it out
ReincarnatedSaint:Nah, I am not complaining, I am new author too. I just saw jumbled sentences and confusing phrases. So I just throught of pointing it out
Lmao. That was very nice of you. I can see that your very honest and still friendly. I will check your novel or series out, kind sir.
ReincarnatedSaint:Yeah sure ReincarnatedSaint#2904 Add me on Discord
You keep switching between- here is an example- he walked into the room, notices that the door opposite of him is still closed. Do you get the problem in that sentence? If you wish, I would love to help you. I am a new novelist, on this site. But I do freelancing writing all the time. XD. I hope you keep up your work, I like your spirit and determination, you at least are trying to fix what you made a mistake. Good luck. I like where the story is going.
XxEagleNightxX:Sorry but I don't really know how to put a synopsis, just bear with me okay Im still new
ZappCode:You keep switching between- here is an example- he walked into the room, notices that the door opposite of him is still closed. Do you get the problem in that sentence? If you wish, I would love to help you. I am a new novelist, on this site. But I do freelancing writing all the time. XD. I hope you keep up your work, I like your spirit and determination, you at least are trying to fix what you made a mistake. Good luck. I like where the story is going.
ZappCode:You keep switching between- here is an example- he walked into the room, notices that the door opposite of him is still closed. Do you get the problem in that sentence? If you wish, I would love to help you. I am a new novelist, on this site. But I do freelancing writing all the time. XD. I hope you keep up your work, I like your spirit and determination, you at least are trying to fix what you made a mistake. Good luck. I like where the story is going.
This story is great, though I would suggest varying the build of the girls a bit, and maybe some "research" to add some variety to the r18 chapters (Literotica has a large variety of research materials from many different authors in many styles that may provide some inspiration) I can't wait to see how the story continues it has been a great read so far
